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    لن توڑ کہانی لکھی آپ نے مزہ آ گیا
    مزید بھی لکھیں

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    buht zbrdst

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    سٹوری پسند کرنے کےلیے سب کا شکریہ ۔ اینڈ سپیشل تھینکس ٹو سٹوری میکر فار پی ڈی ایف۔


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    Quote Originally Posted by Danish ch View Post


    سٹوری پسند کرنے کےلیے سب کا شکریہ ۔ اینڈ سپیشل تھینکس ٹو سٹوری میکر فار پی ڈی ایف۔

    arey bahi...

    story jo b writer achey se likhey ga us ko hum readers support lazmi karien gaye.
    han agar hum busy hoon to comment daine mein late ho sakte hain lekin aap ye mat samjhna k humien aap ki kahaniyaan pasand nahi aai...

    mein ne pdf banaya us mein kon sa barri baat hai.

    mujhy jis ne seekhaya, mein ne us ko thanks bola to kehne laga k usman...!
    is ki practice karo.

    nahi to bhool jao gaye.
    socha urdu funda par practice kar laita hoon...

    so... practice jari hai. asim bahi ki tarah ka pdf ready nahi kar pa raha, koshish jari hai umeed hai k jald is kami ko b poora kar doon ga...

    asim bahi se baat hoi thi bol rahe thy k wo abhi busy hain... jald wapis aa jayein gaye...

    tab tak danish bahi ko bolo k achi achi kahaniyaan share karien....

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    کہانی کا سٹارٹ اچھا ہے مگر رفتار بڑی تیز ہے۔ کہانی بھلے سچ ہو مگر لڑکی کو ذرا مشکل سے ماننا چاہیے یا دکھانا ایسا چاہیے کہ بڑی محنت کرنا پڑی۔ پہلی بار تنہائی میں کسنگ تک پہنچنا ،کچھ زیادہ جلدی ہے۔
    ذرا مزید لمبا کرتے،لڑکی کے نخرے بڑھا دیتے ۔سیکس سے پہلے لڑکی کی جھجھک باتوں میں ذرا کم ہوتی یا لڑکی کو جنسی طور پر مشتعل ہوتا دھیرے دھیرے دکھایا جاتا، تو کہانی کو چار چاند لگ جاتے۔
    بہرحال بہترین دانش صاحب۔۔ زبردست۔

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    kia chakas story he jnb. Mazeed stories ka intizar he.

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    Default Wah ji wah jnab...

    Wah jnab ap ny kabhi yeh phenka,kabhi woh phenka,kabhi usko wahan phenka ,or kabhi isko yahan phenka....ch Danish sahab phenkna band ker ky thora sa tawajoo or yaksooi ky sath pehly ek paper py likhain ky ap ny likhna kya hai or kab kya bolna hai...plzzz yeh khel tamasha nahi hai...ajkal aysa to crime patrol dial100 py bhi nahi hota jitna fast ap hain.....thnx

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    Quote Originally Posted by jhurlu View Post
    Wah jnab ap ny kabhi yeh phenka,kabhi woh phenka,kabhi usko wahan phenka ,or kabhi isko yahan phenka....ch Danish sahab phenkna band ker ky thora sa tawajoo or yaksooi ky sath pehly ek paper py likhain ky ap ny likhna kya hai or kab kya bolna hai...plzzz yeh khel tamasha nahi hai...ajkal aysa to crime patrol dial100 py bhi nahi hota jitna fast ap hain.....thnx

    Zara aap aik story likh kar un ki rehnumai karain
    or danish saab ko batain k story aisay likhi jati hai

    mujhay umeed hai k aap aisi story likhain gay k sab ki bolti band ho jai gee

    kya khyal hai jhurlo saab
    k sari battain he hain?


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    جناب بہت ہی زبردست کہانی لکھی
    مزہ آ گیا ہے قسم سے
    اصل زندگی کی کہانیوں اور واقعات کا اپنی ہی مزہ ہوتا ہے
    زبردست جناب

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    Quote Originally Posted by Woodman View Post

    Zara aap aik story likh kar un ki rehnumai karain
    or danish saab ko batain k story aisay likhi jati hai

    mujhay umeed hai k aap aisi story likhain gay k sab ki bolti band ho jai gee

    kya khyal hai jhurlo saab
    k sari battain he hain?

    Sahe kaha woodman sb. Jo log kuch nhen krte woh baten bohat bare krte han.
    Jhurlu sb. aap k story ka wait he. Jis me begair phanke sab kam ho ga.

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